Corrections: Birthday Party

Last night, it was my cousin's party birthday party. Now she is 18 years old. I think that is it is very important​ in this age what to do in this age. ?( a better sentence maybe: I think this is an important age) When I was 18 years old I decided went to  reporter of collage (what does this mean?)
I went there​ and spoke with them but they said  told me you are very young now. tThey didn't accept me. Then I wanted to work so that I earn experience but I didn't find a job. Usually bosses don't show confidence in younger people.

 To Study:
http://dictionary.cambridge.org/grammar/british-grammar/say-or-tell

 Very good writing! great job!

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